Thesis Blog Post

Identify the weak thesis statement:
1. A. I’m going to write about Darwin’s concerns with evolution in The Origin of the Species.
B. Darwin’s concern with survival of the fittest in The Origin of the Species leads him to neglect a potentially conflicting aspect of his theory of evolution-survival as a matter of interdependence.
A is weak in that it is too general. A is not specific and overly broad.
2. A. An important part of one’s college education is learning to better understand others’ points of view.
B. Although an important part of one’s college education is learning to better understand others’ points of view a persistent danger is that the students will simply be required to substitute the teacher’s answers for the ones they grew up uncritically believing.
A is the weakest thesis statement. It is generalized. It is obvious. A true statement.
3. A. By inventing terms, such as “loose fit” and “relaxed fit”, the jean industry has attempted to normalize, even glorify, its product for an older and fatter generation.
B. The jeans industry targets its advertisements to appeal to young adults.
B is the weakest thesis statement. It is not specific. It is overly broad. It is obvious.
4. A. Othello is a play about love and jealousy.
B. Although Othello appears to attack jealousy, it also supports the skepticism of the jealous characters over the naïvete of the lovers.
A is the weakest thesis statement. It is too generalized. It is obvious. It restates conventional wisdom.
5. A. The songs of the punk rock group Minor Threat relate to the Feelings of individuals who dare to be different. Their songs are just composed of pure emotion. Pure emotion is very important in music, because it serves as a vehicle to convey the important message of individuality. Minor Threat’s songs are meaningful to me because I can identify with them.
B. The punk rock group Minor Threat uses emotional lyrics to appeal to their target audience, which considers itself individualistic and therefore the lyrics must convey a message of individuality.
A is the weakest thesis statement. It offers personal conviction for the claim.

My thesis statement.
Why didn’t Offred allow the doctor to help her? She was so frightened, that she wouldn’t dare risk getting caught. She didn’t trust this man. She could end up on the wall she passed daily.
It is arguable, can be supported by the text. It is specific.